NURS 6001 Week 8 Scholarly Paragraph Rebuild Example

Course	NURS 6001 Foundations of Graduate Study
Week	Week 8
Paper type	Paragraph rebuild
Length	About 550 words, 5 pages
Format	APA 7 student paper
School	Walden University
Program	Master of Science in Nursing (MSN)
Updated	October 2026

Free sample paper for NURS 6001 Week 8

Scholarly Paragraph Rebuild: Bedside Shift Report and Patient Safety

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College of Nursing, Walden University

NURS 6001: Foundations of Graduate Study

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Month Day, Year

What this page is doingOne paragraph in, one paragraph out. The labels and the edit list show exactly what changed and why.

Scholarly Paragraph Rebuild: Bedside Shift Report and Patient Safety

Original Draft

"I really think bedside report is the best thing that's happened to our unit in years. When we did report at the desk, things got missed a lot, like one time a patient's IV had infiltrated and nobody noticed until the next shift because the off-going nurse just said everything was fine. Now we go in the room together and see the patient, so stuff like that doesn't happen. Patients like it too because they get to hear what's going on and they can correct us if we get something wrong. Some nurses complain that it takes too long but honestly I think that's just because they don't want to change. Every hospital should be doing it this way, it's just common sense and it makes everything safer for everyone."

Rebuilt Paragraph

[Main idea] Holding the nursing handoff in the patient's room rather than at the desk can improve safety at change of shift, although its effects on nurses' workload deserve closer study. [Evidence] Bedside handoff has attracted substantial research: a systematic review identified 41 research articles on the practice published between 2008 and 2014 (Mardis et al., 2016). In a quasi-experimental study on seven medical-surgical units, patient falls at shift change decreased substantially after bedside report was introduced, and patients rated items related to their involvement in report more highly (Sand-Jecklin & Sherman, 2014). [Analysis] Seeing the patient together gives both nurses a chance to verify what is being handed over, which may explain the drop in falls during a period when patients are often least observed. The same study, however, found that nurses felt report took longer, although overtime did not increase, which suggests that perceived burden rather than actual time may be the main barrier. [Lead out] Understanding that barrier is the focus of the next section.

What this page is doingEach part is labeled with its MEAL element. The analysis sentences are the writer's own reasoning, which is the part most drafts leave out.

Edit List

1. Removed the anecdote about the infiltrated IV. A single memory cannot support a general claim, and it could identify a colleague.

2. Replaced "the best thing that's happened" with a claim that can be tested: bedside report can improve safety at change of shift.

3. Added two sources: a systematic review to establish that the practice is well studied, and a quasi-experimental study for outcome evidence.

4. Removed first person and contractions, following the Walden Writing Center's guidance on scholarly voice (Walden University Writing Center, n.d.).

5. Replaced vague words, including "things," "stuff" and "a lot," with specific ones: falls, patient involvement, overtime.

6. Turned the dismissal of colleagues' complaints into analysis. The evidence shows nurses perceived report as longer while overtime did not rise, which is worth examining rather than dismissing.

7. Removed "every hospital should" and "common sense." The evidence supports a qualified claim, not a universal one.

8. Added a lead-out sentence so the paragraph points toward the next part of the paper.

Habits That Were Hardest to Break

Two habits resisted change. The first was reaching for a story from my own unit; I have many, and they feel like evidence. The second was ending on a strong opinion. It took several attempts before the analysis sentences explained the evidence instead of cheering for it. The MEAL structure helped most by giving the analysis its own slot, which made its absence in the original obvious.

References

Mardis, T., Mardis, M., Davis, J., Justice, E. M., Riley Holdinsky, S., Donnelly, J., Ragozine-Bush, H., & Riesenberg, L. A. (2016). Bedside shift-to-shift handoffs: A systematic review of the literature. Journal of Nursing Care Quality, 31(1), 54-60. https://doi.org/10.1097/NCQ.0000000000000142

Sand-Jecklin, K., & Sherman, J. (2014). A quantitative assessment of patient and nurse outcomes of bedside nursing report implementation. Journal of Clinical Nursing, 23(19-20), 2854-2863. https://doi.org/10.1111/jocn.12575

Walden University Writing Center. (n.d.). Writing Center home. https://academicguides.waldenu.edu/writingcenter

The Walden NURS 6001 Week 8 instructions

Week 8 of NURS 6001 usually asks you to revise an informal paragraph into scholarly writing. You identify the claim, add evidence with citations, analyze it, link to the larger argument and document your edits. Faculty check structure first: one claim, evidence that supports it and analysis. Cite the writing model and sources in APA 7. Personal experience can appear when framed as an example and supported by evidence. First person is usually removed in scholarly paragraphs. An edit list shows what changed and why. NURS 6001 faculty want the original and rebuilt paragraphs side by side with an edit list. Cite at least two sources in the rebuilt paragraph.

How this NURS 6001 Week 8 example is built

The original paragraph appears first, unedited, about a hundred and fifty words of the kind a returning nurse might draft from experience: a strong opinion, a hospital anecdote, contractions and no citation. The rebuilt paragraph sits directly beneath it. Its opening sentence states one claim about bedside report and patient safety; two cited sources supply the evidence; three sentences of the author's own analysis interpret that evidence; a final sentence leads toward the next point in the imagined paper. Each part is labeled in the margin with its MEAL element. A numbered edit list then records the changes, from removing the anecdote to replacing vague words such as 'things' and 'a lot'. The piece closes on a short note about which habits proved hardest to break.

Where the marks sit in the NURS 6001 Week 8 rubric

Structure earns the rebuilt paragraph its marks before style does. Faculty check first that one claim governs the whole paragraph, then that the evidence belongs to that claim, then that analysis in the author's voice interprets what the sources report. The example makes all three checkable by labeling each MEAL element in the margin. A second row usually concerns scholarly register: third person where appropriate, precise terms, no contractions, no anecdote standing in for evidence. The edit list secures credit for self-awareness, since it shows changes were understood rather than accepted wholesale from tracked changes. A rebuild forfeits credit when the revised version is only the original with citations bolted on, or when the analysis sentences simply restate the sources in slightly different words.

NURS 6001 Week 8 help: mistakes that cost marks

Rebuilt paragraphs lose the most when they still contain two claims or none. State one claim first. Evidence that misses the claim is the next problem. Choose studies on bedside report and safety. Writers also keep opinion phrases such as "I really think." Replace them with claims. Avoid deleting the analysis sentence. Explain what the evidence means. Keep the anecdote only if framed as an example. Close with the link to the next paragraph. Writers also forget transition words that link evidence to analysis. Add them. Another frequent slip is a link sentence that repeats the claim. Point to the next idea instead.

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NURS 6001 Week 8 questions, answered

What is the MEAL plan the example uses?

It is the paragraph model taught by the Walden Writing Center: main idea, evidence, analysis and lead-out. Each element has a job, and a strong academic paragraph usually contains all four in that order. The example labels them in the margin so the model can be seen working. If your instructor teaches a different paragraph structure, the rebuild written for you uses that one instead.

Can personal nursing experience appear in a scholarly paragraph?

Sometimes, as illustration after the evidence, rarely as the evidence itself. The example removes its anecdote because the original used it in place of sources. Some assignments invite experience explicitly, especially reflective ones, and then it belongs. Your rubric settles that question, but in a paragraph arguing a practice claim, published evidence has to carry the weight and the story can only support it.

Why is first person removed from the rebuilt paragraph?

APA 7 permits first person when describing the author's own actions, and the example does not treat it as an error in general. It is removed here because the original used 'I believe' as a substitute for argument. Where your instructions allow first person, the sample keeps it for statements about your own work and avoids it for claims that need published evidence behind them.

Where can I find a free NURS 6001 Week 8 sample paper?

The bedside report paragraph rebuild is reproduced here with the original draft, the MEAL rebuild, the edit list and the habits hardest to break.

What draft is rebuilt in NURS 6001 Week 8?

An informal story about an infiltrated IV missed at desk report, rebuilt into a scholarly paragraph on bedside report.