HCAD 9000 Week 2 Problem Chapter Revision Example

Rebuilding Chapter 1 Against the Study That Was Actually Done: The Opening as First Drafted, the Opening as Revised and What in the Completed Work Forced Each Change

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Walden University

HCAD 9000: Healthcare Administration Dissertation

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Month Day, Year

Rebuilding Chapter 1 Against the Study That Was Actually Done: The Opening as First Drafted, the Opening as Revised and What in the Completed Work Forced Each Change

Why the Opening Had to Change

Chapter 1 of this dissertation was drafted in early 2024, before data collection, and it described the study as planned. The completed study examined whether information accompanying referrals from independent primary care practices to a regional system's specialists became more complete and timely after the system acquired those practices. Cedar Basin Health, the setting, is a composite. Four kinds of drift separate the first draft from the finished work. This document shows the opening paragraphs as first drafted, with the overreaching sentences marked by bracketed numbers, then the rebuilt version, then a note for each change explaining what in the completed study required it.

The Opening as First Drafted

Health systems in the United States have acquired thousands of physician practices over the past decade, promising that integration would improve coordination, reduce duplication and lower costs. [1] This study will examine the effect of hospital acquisition of physician practices on care coordination, readmissions and duplicate diagnostic testing. [2] Using data from physician practices acquired by a regional health system, the study will show whether integration delivers its promised benefits across specialties. Prior research has examined prices and hospital quality measures but has not examined coordination directly. [3] Findings will inform system leaders seeking to reduce the estimated billions of dollars wasted each year on poorly coordinated care. [4] The study will determine whether ownership causes improvements in the flow of clinical information between practices and specialists.

The Opening as Rebuilt

Health systems in the United States have acquired many physician practices over the past decade, often with the stated aim of improving coordination between primary and specialty care. Research has shown that such acquisitions change prices and the destinations of referrals (Carlin et al., 2016), but has rarely examined whether they change the information that accompanies a referral, even though primary care physicians and specialists report frequent gaps in that information (O'Malley & Reschovsky, 2011). This study examined referrals from 14 independent primary care practices acquired by a regional health system between 2021 and 2023, and from 22 practices that remained independent, to the system's specialists in four specialties. It assessed whether the completeness and timeliness of referral information changed after acquisition, relative to practices not acquired, and whether any change hinged on when the acquired practice moved onto the system's electronic record. The study did not measure clinical outcomes such as readmissions or duplicate testing; it measured the information on which coordination depends.

Notes on Each Change

Change 1, an outcome named and never produced. The first draft promised readmissions and duplicate testing. The completed study never analyzed either, because the data agreement with the system covered referral records but not hospital claims. Leaving those outcomes in the opening would promise results the dissertation cannot deliver, and a reader would look for them in Chapter 4. The rebuilt version names the outcomes actually measured and states plainly what was not.

Change 2, a population described more broadly than the one reached. The first draft referred to "physician practices" and "across specialties." The completed study reached 36 primary care practices and referrals to four specialties: cardiology, gastroenterology, neurology and orthopedics. The rebuilt version names that population, so that no reader extends the findings to specialty practices or to specialties not studied.

Change 3, a significance claim the study cannot support. The first draft linked the study to billions of dollars wasted on poor coordination. Whatever the national figure, this study produced no cost estimate, and the sentence invited the reader to expect one. The rebuilt version locates significance in the gap the study fills, the absence of evidence on referral information after acquisition, and supports it with sources that address that gap directly, including the breakdowns in outpatient referral communication documented by Gandhi et al. (2000).

Change 4, method language that promised causation. The first draft said the study would determine whether ownership causes improvement. The completed study compared changes in acquired and non-acquired practices over time, a design that supports conclusions about change following acquisition relative to a comparison group but not about cause in the strict sense. The rebuilt version uses "assessed whether ... changed ... relative to," which matches what the design can support. The rebuilt opening also adds the record conversion question, which the first draft did not anticipate and which became central once the data showed that acquisition and conversion happened at different times.

What the First Draft Got Right

Not everything in the 2024 opening needed to change, and the revision keeps what still holds. The first sentence's observation that health systems have acquired many practices remains accurate and is kept, with "thousands" softened to "many" because the draft cited no count. The draft's point that earlier research had examined prices and hospital quality measures but not coordination directly also survives; it is now supported by named sources and narrowed to referral information, which is the part of coordination the study measured. The draft's plain, direct style is kept as well. Its sentences were short and its claims were easy to locate, which is why the four problems could be marked so precisely. A rebuild that changed every sentence would have made it harder for the committee to see which changes the completed study forced and which were matters of taste, so sentences that were accurate were left in their original form wherever possible.

What the Revision Means for the Rest of the Chapter

The purpose statement, research questions and definitions later in Chapter 1 will be revised to match the rebuilt opening. The research questions will gain the third question on record conversion, with a note in Chapter 3 explaining when it was added and why. The significance section will drop the cost argument. Each change will be recorded in the revision log so the committee can trace the chapter from proposal to final form.

References

Carlin, C. S., Feldman, R., & Dowd, B. (2016). The impact of hospital acquisition of physician practices on referral patterns. Health Economics, 25(4), 439-454. https://doi.org/10.1002/hec.3160

Gandhi, T. K., Sittig, D. F., Franklin, M., Sussman, A. J., Fairchild, D. G., & Bates, D. W. (2000). Communication breakdown in the outpatient referral process. Journal of General Internal Medicine, 15(9), 626-631. https://doi.org/10.1046/j.1525-1497.2000.91119.x

O'Malley, A. S., & Reschovsky, J. D. (2011). Referral and consultation communication between primary care and specialist physicians: Finding common ground. Archives of Internal Medicine, 171(1), 56-65. https://doi.org/10.1001/archinternmed.2010.480